Awful journalism in the Argus ... again

goldstone · Dec 23, 2015

This headline appeared in the Argus online:

TWO children returned home from a visit to the shops to discover their mother had unexpectedly died.

UNEXPECTEDLY died

What other kind of "died" is there unless someone has been seriously ill? Who writes this crap? And who edits it? They should be ashamed.

One hot tub one ambition · Dec 23, 2015

Not too horrendous - I'm sure Gordon Greet will have another idea/complaint...

Hampster Gull · Dec 23, 2015

The Argus has been doing a good job recently

Ken Livingstone Seagull · Dec 23, 2015

What's the problem? A woman with two child-aged children (sic) who dies while the kids are at the shops sounds "unexpected" to me.

Plenty of other deaths (cancer, heart trouble, old age, hospitalized) can be classified as expected, or at least not out-of-the-ordinary. This sounds out-of-the-ordinary, and, well, unexpected.

Are you on Angry Pills, or something? :kiss:

easynow · Dec 23, 2015

that's so sad. poor kids.

Puppet Master · Dec 23, 2015

I really don't get it...

greyseagull · Dec 23, 2015

Where's Ken from Horsham when you need him?

Lincoln Imp · Dec 23, 2015

At least it didn't finish with a Brian Owen postscript reporting that the children had admitted they were upset.

Guy Fawkes · Dec 24, 2015

goldstone said:
This headline appeared in the Argus online:

TWO children returned home from a visit to the shops to discover their mother had unexpectedly died.

UNEXPECTEDLY died What other kind of "died" is there unless someone has been seriously ill? Who writes this crap? And who edits it? They should be ashamed.

2 children have just lost a parent and only a couple of days before Christmas, and you want to use their loss as the basis of some sort of point scoring thing against the Argus for reporting on it

I'd think again as to who should be ashamed if i were you.

dazzer6666 · Dec 24, 2015

Guy Fawkes said:
2 children have just lost a parent and only a couple of days before Christmas, and you want to use their loss as the basis of some sort of point scoring thing against the Argus for reporting on it

I'd think again as to who should be ashamed.

Yup, this I think. So sad.

Eeyore · Dec 24, 2015

Not sure the write up has a huge grammatical problem. Feel sorry for those kids.

Pavilionaire · Dec 24, 2015

goldstone said:
This headline appeared in the Argus online:

TWO children returned home from a visit to the shops to discover their mother had unexpectedly died.

UNEXPECTEDLY died What other kind of "died" is there unless someone has been seriously ill? Who writes this crap? And who edits it? They should be ashamed.

Keep it light. Have a mince pie.

Acker79 · Dec 24, 2015

goldstone said:
UNEXPECTEDLY died What other kind of "died" is there unless someone has been seriously ill? Who writes this crap? And who edits it? They should be ashamed.

You've answered your own question. If someone pops out and comes home and their gravely ill relative has died, it's not a story. Making it clear the death is unexpected makes it clear that the tragedy is from the unexpectedness as well as the death.

I really don't see the problem.

If you were to highlight that there has been an increase in reporting victims of crimes as 'local' as if that makes it somehow worse compared to visitors to the town being the victims of crimes.

goldstone · Dec 24, 2015

Acker79 said:
You've answered your own question. If someone pops out and comes home and their gravely ill relative has died, it's not a story. Making it clear the death is unexpected makes it clear that the tragedy is from the unexpectedness as well as the death.

I really don't see the problem.

If you were to highlight that there has been an increase in reporting victims of crimes as 'local' as if that makes it somehow worse compared to visitors to the town being the victims of crimes.

In my opinion it's the word "unexpectedly" that is totally out of place. What's wrong with: TWO children returned home from a visit to the shops to discover their mother had died. ? Seems to cover the story just fine.

drew · Dec 24, 2015

goldstone said:
In my opinion it's the word "unexpectedly" that is totally out of place. What's wrong with: TWO children returned home from a visit to the shops to discover their mother had died. ? Seems to cover the story just fine.

Sounds a bit like you're trying to back track a bit now!

goldstone · Dec 24, 2015

drew said:
Sounds a bit like you're trying to back track a bit now!

Backtrack? Moi? No, my point from the start was the unnecessary use of the word "unexpectedly".

BensGrandad · Dec 24, 2015

goldstone said:
Backtrack? Moi? No, my point from the start was the unnecessary use of the word "unexpectedly".

But surely it was unexpected so what is wrong with the reporting and as has been said more pity should be shown to the children rather than complain about the report.

jonny.rainbow · Dec 24, 2015

When NSC sides with the Argus over you, it is certain you have spectacularly failed.

I could have just written 'failed', but felt the adverb helped emphasise the meaning of my sentence.

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